The Editor’s Feedback

You asked for my comments on your first draft. Well, you know me, Charles, I can be brutally honest, but then again, isn’t that what you pay me to be? So here goes, Charles.

I think your protagonist is too impetuous, while your heroine is overly gregarious, and your secondary characters are shallow. The plot is lean on drama, the conflicts feel contrived, and your dialogue is stilted. There are few surprises, no twists or turns. Bottom line, Charles, there is nothing novel about your novel and, quite frankly, I was bored to tears.

That said, as your editor, I took the liberty of jotting down a few notes — well, 27 single-spaced pages worth of notes — that I think you might find useful when you start work on your second draft. Should you decide, that is, to even bother.

I know that, after reading this, you hate me and will probably want to fire me. But I don’t want to be a burden on you, so please consider this to be my letter of resignation.

One last thing, Charles. Don’t quit your day job.

Written for these daily prompts: The Daily Spur (comment), Your Daily Word Prompt (impetuous), Word of the Day Challenge (gregarious), Fandango’s One-Word Challenge (lean), My Vivid Blog (novel), and Ragtag Daily Prompt (resignation).

14 thoughts on “The Editor’s Feedback

  1. Nope, Not Pam August 21, 2021 / 3:01 am

    Yep 😕

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  2. writerravenclaw August 21, 2021 / 3:04 am

    You think it is polished and then they ask the questions and cover it in comments.

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  3. SidneyAspennWrites August 21, 2021 / 4:17 am

    Poor Charles! 😬
    Always love how you weave different daily prompts into a single story.

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  4. mariamichaela August 21, 2021 / 7:43 am

    I think Charles needs a drink now 😂

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  5. Dee Min August 21, 2021 / 8:26 am

    Ohhlalahhh … Brutal. Charles curled up in a ball and stayed there for a week in tears. Then he called his boss and begged for his day job back. 😝😝😝

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  6. Marilyn Armstrong August 21, 2021 / 1:28 pm

    Oh how often I’ve wanted to tell someone that, but I couldn’t do it. Writers are so sensitive — at least about their writing. I figure extensive rejection letter will make the point for me.

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  7. leigha66 September 5, 2021 / 11:16 pm

    A little brutal honesty. Great job with all the prompts!

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