#WDYS — Love Lost

He stood there in the shadows of her building, watching the woman of his dreams and his former rival, the winner of her heart, walking hand in hand into her apartment. A forlorn look appeared on his face as he realized that he had lost in his rivalry to win her heart. He had it all — looks, charm, money — and he had never previously failed to excel when it came to being able to woo a prospective lover. This was not anything he’d ever dealt with before and he was having a hard time trying to handle this crushing defeat. He was having trouble catching his breath. He moved his hat over his chest so that no one would be able to detect the rapid pounding of his heart beneath his breast.

Hours went by and he continued to wait and watch until, in the late afternoon, he saw the two of them emerge from her apartment. They were holding hands, smiling, chatting as new lovers do. He could not accept this humiliation. He couldn’t allow this to happen. He walked over to them as they walked toward the street. He reached out for her, but her look told him she wanted no part of him. His rival pulled his shoulders back and puffed out his chest in an almost comical effort to seem intimidating.

“What has he got that I haven’t?” he asked her. “What can he give you that I can’t? You’ve made a huge mistake that you will regret.” He pulled out a small pistol he had tucked in his pants behind his back and beneath his t-shirt. “This cannot be,” he said. “You were meant to be mine.” And with that, he fired two shots point blank at the hearts of his victims. “God forgive me,” he said, as he pressed the gun to his temple and fired again.


I’m sorry that this story, written for Sadje’s What Do You See? prompt, turned out to be so dark. I hadn’t intended it to be that way when I first started writing it, but the words took the tale where they wanted it to go. Also written for these daily prompts: Fandango’s One-Word Challenge (rivalry), Your Daily Word Prompt (excel), Ragtag Daily Prompt (handle), and Word of the Day Challenge (catching). Photo credit: Sean Lee at Unsplash.

15 thoughts on “#WDYS — Love Lost

  1. Sadje October 5, 2020 / 7:02 pm

    Oh such a sad ending. Broken hearts sometimes make bad decisions. Thanks for joining in the challenge Fandango

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  2. Stine Writing October 6, 2020 / 3:50 pm

    Wow, yeah that was pretty dark…He doesn’t seem like the pistol type but looks can be deceiving.

    Liked by 1 person

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