Ticks All the Boxes

20E5D511-E2A1-4386-9FCE-F98127A39BAB“I’m really excited to show you this next property,” the broker said. “It’s in the zip code you said you preferred.

“What’s the asking price?” Mickey asked.

“It’s a little above your budget,” the broker said. “They’re asking $1.2 million.”

“A little above?” Mickey said. “That’s malarkey. Four hundred thousand is not a little over budget. It’s a whole lot over budget.”

“But it does tick all your boxes and it’s really quite a unique property,” the broker said. “I’ll even offer to shave a percentage point off of my commission.”

“I appreciate that,” Mickey said, “but I’m going to have to impose upon you the need to not exceed my max amount of $800 thousand and you still need to find me something that ticks all my boxes but doesn’t go over budget.”

“Yes sir,” the broker said, “your wish is my command. Let’s head to the car and I’ll show you a few other properties.” As they were walking to the car, the broker thought about how much she hated her job.


Written for these one-word prompts: Fandango’s One-Word Challenge (property, impose), Ragtag Daily Prompt (zip), Word of the Day Challenge (malarkey), Your Daily Word Prompt (unique, percentage), and Scott’s Daily Prompt (command).

12 thoughts on “Ticks All the Boxes

  1. The Haunted Wordsmith November 17, 2018 / 6:53 pm

    Reminds me of all those home improvement and buying shows where they throw around six figures like they are buying a candy bar

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  2. cagedunn November 17, 2018 / 7:16 pm

    this is excellent, but for one minor little thing, and from a storytelling perspective only. Using the name for one character makes him the main character, but you have an internal thought of the unnamed character.
    How to fix? When Mickey first spouts his words, add a tiny bit of info, ‘As my broker,’ and then use the broker’s name (I’d go for a femme name, but that’s just me).

    or, the alternative, just get the broker to speak it as dialogue.
    No problemo!

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    • Fandango November 17, 2018 / 10:47 pm

      Thanks. A good point, and one I hadn’t considered when the broker had her bit of internal dialog at the end. Thanks for the tip, Cage.

      Liked by 1 person

  3. Sight11 November 17, 2018 / 8:18 pm

    So how many people did you saw before finally settling into the one you’re now?

    Liked by 2 people

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